Flash Fiction: The Sea

She stood on the beach, mittened hands pushed deep into the pockets of her winter coat as she gazed at the sparkling sea. Gulls cried overhead, floating and swooping against the blue sky. A gust of air blew in her face, making her burrow her chin into her scarf. A dog barked from somewhere further back; no doubt its owner had taken it out for a walk, making the most of the sunshine. The barking got louder and louder until the dog bounded into view, galloping towards the sea. She laughed as it plunged into the icy water, then ran towards it, coming to a halt at the water’s edge. The dog barked in reply to its owner’s call then rushed towards her, nearly crashing into her in its haste.

A wave crept towards her shoes, licked them then retreated. She eyed the next, this one too timid to dare reach her but she could see its successor gathering itself. She tugged off her boots and socks just in time for it to wrap itself over her feet and ankles. She gasped. Then, to distract herself, began tearing off her clothes. She scrunched them into a ball and flung them behind her, hoping they’d land on dry sand. Her feet ached and the wind blew on her goose-pimpled skin. She smiled at the sea and ran.

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10 thoughts on “Flash Fiction: The Sea

  1. This person is either very close to nature or has something darker in mind. Your description was good enough for me to feel a chill and the shock of the cold water on my feet (and i’m wearing furry slippers).

  2. “A wave crept towards her shoes, licked them then retreated. She eyed the next, this one too timid to dare reach her but she could see its successor gathering itself.” — I loved these lines because they’re so true. I’ve stood at the water’s edge many times and watched the waves rise and fall, teasing you to come farther out.

  3. You really captured the essence of being by the sea, I too loved these lines the best. “A wave crept towards her shoes, licked them then retreated. She eyed the next, this one too timid to dare reach her but she could see its successor gathering itself.”

  4. I was a little worried that her original intention was darker, but the fact she wants her clothes to land on dry sand, and the fact she seems to be revelling in the joy of it all, makes this a wonderful little story. 🙂

  5. To tell you the truth, I also thought this would come out as something darker. I didn’t think about the effect of her throwing her clothes so that they’re on dry sand before. I might remove/change that detail and see how much it changes things. Thanks.

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